http://diyflowercraft.com/blog/341/if-anybody-has-a-few-minutes-could-you-read-this-short-script-of-a-scene-i-wrote-and-give-me-some-feedback/ Unique Flower Arrangements Made Easy - DIY Flower Craft Tue, 17 Aug 2010 06:43:59 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=abc hourly 1 http://diyflowercraft.com/blog/341/if-anybody-has-a-few-minutes-could-you-read-this-short-script-of-a-scene-i-wrote-and-give-me-some-feedback/comment-page-1/#comment-1704 The Sable Basilisk Tue, 15 Dec 2009 10:35:59 +0000 http://diyflowercraft.com/blog/341/if-anybody-has-a-few-minutes-could-you-read-this-short-script-of-a-scene-i-wrote-and-give-me-some-feedback/#comment-1704 This is good, it's genuinely well-written and has a lot of potential. If you wanted to make it more professional, then I'd advise taking out a lot of the stage directions - they would generally be added in in a "shooting script". But if you're just doing it for fun then it doesn't really matter. Very good. Very enjoyable.<br><b>References : </b><br> This is good, it’s genuinely well-written and has a lot of potential. If you wanted to make it more professional, then I’d advise taking out a lot of the stage directions – they would generally be added in in a "shooting script". But if you’re just doing it for fun then it doesn’t really matter. Very good. Very enjoyable.
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]]> http://diyflowercraft.com/blog/341/if-anybody-has-a-few-minutes-could-you-read-this-short-script-of-a-scene-i-wrote-and-give-me-some-feedback/comment-page-1/#comment-1703 Joshua Tue, 15 Dec 2009 10:23:59 +0000 http://diyflowercraft.com/blog/341/if-anybody-has-a-few-minutes-could-you-read-this-short-script-of-a-scene-i-wrote-and-give-me-some-feedback/#comment-1703 I think its good but i do agree you revealed to much in the beggienig but overall the scene is really good with details it feels like your actually there<br><b>References : </b><br> I think its good but i do agree you revealed to much in the beggienig but overall the scene is really good with details it feels like your actually there
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]]> http://diyflowercraft.com/blog/341/if-anybody-has-a-few-minutes-could-you-read-this-short-script-of-a-scene-i-wrote-and-give-me-some-feedback/comment-page-1/#comment-1702 jazzybabe7 Tue, 15 Dec 2009 09:58:59 +0000 http://diyflowercraft.com/blog/341/if-anybody-has-a-few-minutes-could-you-read-this-short-script-of-a-scene-i-wrote-and-give-me-some-feedback/#comment-1702 I liked this a lot, but I think you revealed too much in one scene. I liked how Charlie and Sophia's friendship has a huge sense of trust, but Sophia's still cautious about opening up. I think you could do a flashback to the 14th birthday party, or the day before. Overall, this is a solid scene.<br><b>References : </b><br> I liked this a lot, but I think you revealed too much in one scene. I liked how Charlie and Sophia’s friendship has a huge sense of trust, but Sophia’s still cautious about opening up. I think you could do a flashback to the 14th birthday party, or the day before. Overall, this is a solid scene.
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